Thank you Serins for starting this poem and laying down the intensity with which this poem flows. I really enjoyed writing this one.
Written by Serins and Twindaddy
Whispering, shouting, screaming
Life and Words have no meaning
Hollow echo…o..O
Breath! No Air!
Don’t care!
Screaming whisper!
Turns around!
Unbound!
Ha! HA! HA! …a…a
Echo near and far
Stop!
Make it Stop!
STOP
Gasping, hyperventilating, crying
Fiery hands grasp my heart, prying
Muffles the beat…beat…beat…beat…
I cry out in despair
There’s no one there
No one cares!
Strangled blood vessels pop, pop, pop
My heart grinds to a stop
Stop
Make it stop!
Pop, pop, pop!
Pain just pain
Darkness left unbound
no one around
Silence! Quiet!
Just make no sound…
Lost, faraway, UN-found.
Heart reaching for words to retrieve
Lungs grasping for air to breathe
Reach out! Reach out! Reach out!
beat.. beat… beat…
Please help me get back on my feat….
Falling, stumbling, faltering
On hand and knees, prone
Suffering in blackness, alone
A cry, a wail
Plead for help, to no avail
Demons the hammer, I’m the nail
Bam! Bam! Bam!
Pounded deep under, I am
Wham! Wham! Wham!
The rhythm of this makes you read faster and faster. I feel like I’ve had a jolt of electric in my system now. Fantastic you two!
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Thanks, Laura!
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Thanks to you for writing it with me. 🙂 was a bit different… 🙂
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Yes, it’s very different from anything I’ve ever done before.
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Well done! Loved the staccato tempo!
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Thanks! Serins established the tempo. I just went with it. I really like it, though. I might try to do an up-tempo poem myself.
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Very intense.
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Thanks, Jaded!
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That rythm! That speed! That rime!
I love how this poem is more than words. It has sound effects, if you know what I mean. *applause*
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Thanks, NBI!
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It does. Thanks. 🙂
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This is what they mean when they say that often times a person’s best work comes from a place of deep despair. Wow.
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I can only speak for myself, but I often times write my best poetry (and am only inspired to do so) when I’m suffering. These last few days, though, I’ve been in a pretty good place and the poetry has been flowing nonetheless. I hope it stays that way.
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I always think that you need to channel the pain and try to make something beautiful from it…..
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WOW! You guys, that was INTENSE 😀 I love it 😀
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It WAS intense! I loved the tempo she set. I’m gonna try to do that again sometime.
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I’m impressed. And yes – to echo another comment, the onomatopaea was very effective.
WTG Serins 😀
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Thanks. I was quite impressed that TD was able to write this with me, it was one of those poetry pieces that would just let me go to sleep before I jotted my thoughts down. 🙂
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I LIKE WHEN THOSE HAPPEN! I actually had one LAST NIGHT but I was so, so tired I DID go to sleep, and now it’s gone.
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This one flows so well, so rapid fire. The intensity is great.
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I really loved the intensity of this one, too. Thank you!
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Try, try, again. Crazy Good Parent is focusing on men’s voices this month. I would love to reblog this. If you could, I would rather it appeared in whole on CGP with a link back to td421, so I would give you authorship privileges. Sound ok?
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Sure! You can reblog it! Thank you!
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Reblogged this on Crazy Good Parent and commented:
The majority of voices featured on Crazy Good Parent are women’s. Researchers continually find that women are more communicative, especially about their emotions. So, it’s a special treat to find a neurodiverse father blogging about his emotional life. Twindaddy, who blogs at td421.wordpress.com, describes himself as “Sometimes funny. Sometimes serious. Always genuine.” I would add brave and honest.
Enjoy this poem co-written by Twindaddy and Serins.
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Thanks for the reblog!!
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Any time you want to write a guest post, I’m ready to publish it.
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Honestly, I don’t feel I have anything worthy to say there.
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You are far too humble, my friend. Far too humble. Just your experience parenting through depression is enough. There are so few fathers with mental health issues even ready to admit they have a problem, let alone talk or write about it. But, c’est la vie. Be well.
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Okay. I’ll keep it in mind. Promise. I just need to figure out a way to write it out.
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